This storyline could have been great but it was poorly executed with too many holes in the plot-line that was not flowing. I felt Jane's character was not shaped well and the phase from her kidnap and the growth of their love was poorly plotted. It started off great addressing Vishouss conflicting emotions regarding his best friend Butch, his mental powers missing, then his horrid past life and the effect to the revelation of his mothers' identity and that he's to be the Primale; all of which was well plotted and aroused a whole lot of intense emotions.
Vishous has a very complex and intriguing personality. In previous books he's portrayed as highly intellectual, a computer genius, level-headed and tough guy with the ability to see the future, read minds, and can incinerate with a glowing hand; all of the abilities which he finds to be a curse. Then he finds a friend in Beths (Wraths wife) friend, Butch and over the series we see how attached they become. In "Lover Revealed" we discover that his feelings for his best friend Butch transcends friendship and that he's somewhat jealous of him with Marissa and at the same time awed by their love. In this book we learn of his excruciating past under his father , the infamous Bloodletter's where he had been starved of food, warmth and any little happiness, beaten, partially castrated and scarred with evil warning tattoos. The aftereffects of that; he's a hard drinker, indulges in BDSM and he had been a void of emotions, unfeeling to everyone and everything until he met Butch and the complication of his feeling for his friend is cracking his perfectly sculpted cold wall and loosening his grip on living, then he meets Jane and his cured not only from the bullet wounds but his past too? That felt like an injustice to his character. I thought the BDSM issue could have been further developed to reflect on his inner turmoil since it was a defining part of his personality and it was built such as it was a problem but then it was forgotten. Vishouss past was well written but his present story was a letdown. It was very heartbreaking whenever in the past he yearns for his mothers' love, imagining her soothing and caring for him. In the flashback, it was said that Dariuss diary was V's one sole happiness at the camp and that he was his hero who helped him hold on to his sanity but then why didn't they bond when they finally met ? And there was no impression of V feeling of Dariuss death.
Jane, I felt was one major flop in this book. Her character was cursory, one dimensional and lacked depth. The way she managed her emotions despite her situation was interesting although a little drama would added interest to the story but I can accept given her analytical mind. I liked her commitment to her job and that she refused to show weakness, the fact that she doesn't flinch at the sight of violence and the scene where she ordered V around was fun. Other than that, her character wasn't alive that I couldn't even picture her in my mind; reading about her was as drab as reading a medical report. I was utterly disappointed as she had a very intriguing opening in the prologue. In theory, she may sound interesting what with her occupation, intelligence, wit, and strength but on paper she fall flat! She seemed so mechanical and the lack of feminine didn't help either. Furthermore, I just couldn't digest her with an elegant upbringing from a Victorian background and a surgeon at that would speak in excessive street slang. It had no connection to her background and why take time to go though her past when it would make little difference to the present? I was so taken off by how every time she is fascinated by V she always had to think of experimenting on him or them. While I understand her interest, Wards way of penning it took off the sense of attachment and also some from her personality.
As for the romance between Vishous and Jane; they were almost non-existent, stale and without warmth which I felt Vishous needed. The connection between Vishous and Butch was much more deep and captivating and had more romance than that with his shellan which makes it really pathetic. I also didn't appreciate him getting over or sorting out his feelings for Butch that easily when it was the centre of his issues, the reason he tried to commit suicide may I add. I personally felt that if she had been ranting, resisting or unyielding after being kidnapped as she takes time to come to terms with the truth that defies her scientific mind and he being his emotionless self battle his newfound instincts as he fall in love with his female, it would have created more tension and drama that would have spiked more emotional connection and bond. Instead, she gives him a h***j** before even getting to know him. She was more interested in his spectacular breed of species and having mind-blowing sex with him than him as a person which made her look so shallow. The sex scenes were also not erotic and since there was no emotion or passion involved it's not a surprise. The plot here was a real mess. The thing is that the subplot about Phury's heartbreak, Johns transition, the chosen Cormia were written with the same flair of Ward's style but the development or in this case the lack of one in the main characters relationship didn't even seem like Wards writing. There was no convincing and well-crafted building involved to explain the supposed love and how V overcomes his emotional scars. I didn't really like the implication that Jane knows exactly what to say to him and keep him at his safe spot; a little conflict before love realized would have added taste like in Z's. While I enjoyed the subplots tremendously due to the weak plot here, I can't help thinking that too much time spent on the secondary characters developments may have caused V's story.
The really good parts were the scene where Vishous finds out the truth from the Scribe Virgin and his conversation about his past feelings for Butch; I thought they were very well written. The scene after Vishous erased Jane's memories and left her depicts the pain and helplessness and it was touching when Jane tears up upon reliving the emotions from V leaving her. It was the perfectly crafted, if only we were shown the similar depth of emotion when she was actually with him. There were really good scenes between John and Zsadist as his mentor was heartwarming. Apart from that I enjoyed the part he calls off the mating ceremony with the chosen too.
Among other concerns are why didn't the author reveal what happened to V's father the infamous Bloodletter as he was the main cause of V's suffering? And, I am truly appalled by the supposedly honorable purpose of the Chosen and the way they are taught and treated which I supposed was Miss Wards intentions? I don't like the idea of the Chosen at all; it spells whoring! How is it possible for the Scribe Virgin to not know of a snake, Directrix amidst her that terrorize the chosen and shot her son? I find this hard to believe. Isn't she aware of her Chosen being tied down to be raped? Or is she the one who instructed it? It is said that all the chosen are fertile everytime if I'm not mistaken but why aren't they going through their needing period? Now there's a part where Z found out that Bella had been bleeding for some time; can't he smell blood if he can smell emotions??
The climax, I was thinking that maybe she would come back as an angel or something but I didn't mind that she turns into a ghost since she can function as a human and V is content but it seems like Ward did that for a dramatic effect because it didn't flow with the plot what the lesser out of nowhere shooting her specifically and on that day with two vampires? I can't really comment on that since there was no p.o.v subplot on the lessers; they just seemed unlikely for the lessers to make such plans. Maybe the lessening society has changed strategy? We'll have to see in the next book.show more